[m-rev.] for review: Minor changes to front page.

Peter Wang novalazy at gmail.com
Wed May 1 10:52:55 AEST 2013


On Tue, 30 Apr 2013 13:04:32 +1000, Paul Bone <paul at bone.id.au> wrote:
> Minor changes to front page.
> 
> include/index.inc:
>     Minor prose changes.
> ---
>  include/index.inc | 4 +++-
>  1 file changed, 3 insertions(+), 1 deletion(-)
> 
> diff --git a/include/index.inc b/include/index.inc
> index e9c1990..62a2fdf 100644
> --- a/include/index.inc
> +++ b/include/index.inc
> @@ -2,9 +2,11 @@
>  <div class="banner"></div>
>  
>  <p style="font-weight: bold; font-family: georgia; font-size: 19px; line-height:1.2em">
> -Mercury is a new logic/functional programming language, which combines
> +Mercury is a novel programming language, which combines
>  the clarity and expressiveness of declarative programming with advanced
>  static analysis and error detection features. 
> +Mercury is inspired by both logic and functional programming,
> +programs usually combine both styles.
>  </p>
>  <p>
>  Its highly optimized

Hi Paul,

Novel sounds like {experimental, untested, gimmick}.
The last sentence is bad style or ungrammatical (comma splice).

I suggest a minimal change from the old version:

   Mercury is a logic/functional programming language which combines
   the clarity and expressiveness of declarative programming with advanced
   static analysis and error detection features. 

(i.e. delete "new" and the comma before which)

Peter



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